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[语法崩坏]英语短文《A boy who called Jimmy》

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Makotowa 发表于 2024-12-28 19:23:25 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
经过寻找硬盘里的老东西,翻出来一篇英语短文,略加修改,发出来给大家读读看。
最初是为了调侃一个同学而写的,语法错误、构词错误、不正统的短语比比皆是,见谅 见谅。。(若能帮我改一下那就太谢谢了)
如果可以的话,欢迎大家续写这个叫做Jimmy的funny boy的故事。
A boy who called Jimmy
      Jimmy is a funny boy . In some days, we call him "Jester" to expressing ours inner emotions.
     Why? Because he is like to do something unpopular like unclearly. For example, he usually listen the someone in our class’s funny dialog, and then retell to someone else in a bad voice.
     He is also can not use his memory well. A day,Eco and I was often talking with him. I askd, "How do you write article for the website?" He think for very long time. When he was finished his thinking and said something, We are very suprised! Do you know what does he say? He just speaked a word——"Huh?" Oh, damn! That often let Eco stamp feet.
     And he also has so many badly habbits. For example, He like to use his fingers knock any things to play virtual music game. Even in the class of the most serious math teacher’s class. One day, the teacher was teaching us how to solve a very hard math problem, All students are doing writing on the paper, A unfriendly sound was come out: Jimmy was knocking in a big voice!! In the end, The teacher came and “fix” him.
     On the other hand, he eat his Gel-pens and school's cards. All of the pens in his pencil-box is shabby and sticky and sticky, with a pungent odor.When his thing fell down on the ground, no one wants to help Jimmy carry it up.
      When you walking in the street, suddenly, you will feel afraid and a big bang will happened on your body. It's must be the “acid hand” from Jimmy.
      But now , there was something change on him right. Such as he thinking more quickly and listening more quite. That’s a good thing of him! We are very happy the know that when we are thinking the Jimmy did things in the past.
      Finally, We are very sorry for ours waste grammar because we are only some students who in a English Club. The story is wrote by imation and something real happened. Thank you for your read! If you help to check the article we are very glad and very thank you.

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Elan 发表于 2024-12-28 21:06:04 | 显示全部楼层
OMG,想改但是无从下手
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 楼主| Makotowa 发表于 2024-12-28 21:12:09 | 显示全部楼层
Elan 发表于 2024-12-28 21:06
OMG,想改但是无从下手

啊…肯定是烂得出奇改不了吧(悲)
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Windy 发表于 2024-12-28 21:24:39 | 显示全部楼层
给人一种艺术但是印度的超级超级咖喱的颗粒感
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 楼主| Makotowa 发表于 2024-12-28 21:28:49 | 显示全部楼层
Windy 发表于 2024-12-28 21:24
给人一种艺术但是印度的超级超级咖喱的颗粒感

吔? …没看懂什么意思
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Windy 发表于 2024-12-28 21:36:43 | 显示全部楼层
Jimmy如此特殊,他的行为可以称得上是“艺术”
反人类的行为细想就有点像印度浓汤,怪难受的
像小彩蛋般的语法错误不免要停下快速移动的视线,有点硌眼睛,便是“颗粒感”
最终把这如混沌咖喱一般的回复搅和再真空压缩一下便成了那一小句
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4_surf 发表于 2024-12-29 13:09:51 | 显示全部楼层
倒觉得没啥必要改,Jimmy这人都这样了,质量参差的文章反而与内容协调
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 楼主| Makotowa 发表于 2024-12-29 13:17:26 | 显示全部楼层
4_surf 发表于 2024-12-29 13:09
倒觉得没啥必要改,Jimmy这人都这样了,质量参差的文章反而与内容协调

你这么一说好像确实
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